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A spectrum of light,
banished with a drip.
My art teacher would be proud :D. Thanks to echo-si for helping... I need to just write a journal entry thanking her hehehehe. Not sure if it's officially a haiku, part 3 in the series. Any critiques?
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Pure-Dax Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2005
LUVIT
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PrincessNAVI Featured By Owner May 8, 2007
Thanks! Sorry, I was on hiatus when you commented. But I am back now and thank you for commenting!
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2Le Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2004
Short, simple, and clear. Just what makes a good haiku :thumbsup:
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echo-si Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2004   Writer
I think this is an absolutely beautiful piece. It has a subtle nod to the earth & all her glory (light is not a commonly used reference, but I think it counts), and is very thought provoking.

good-good-good! :hug:
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mymisfortune Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2003
i like it, except aren't you missing a line? The syllables should be counted..

1st line- 5 syllables
2nd line- 7 syllables
3rd line- 5 syllables

So you're missing the 2nd line. Please add it on, i'd love to see what you come up with! ^_^
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echo-si Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2004   Writer
On haiku: The Japanese language is so radically different from English that the 5-7-5 thing doesn't really...work in our language. So the ideas that the west utilize in Haiku are the idea of one breathe, nature & seasonal imagery & saying something profound.
^keen had a haiku contest a few months back & I got to read up on the form at that time.
:D Hope that helps!!
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mymisfortune Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2004
Hey thanks. You do learn something new everyday. :)

I appreciate you taking your time out to explain that to me. So thanks a lot. And it did help.
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echo-si Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2004   Writer
That's great ^_^
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PrincessNAVI Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2003
nah, what I was experimenting with wasn't that form of haiku. that's only one kind I think. I'm just not sure it's got what it take to count in terms of...what it's about.
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mymisfortune Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2003
are there different forms of it? hm. well i like it. It it's not long enough to express what you want, then why not add another stanza in the same form? Just a suggestion.
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PrincessNAVI Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2003
Yes,yes. I lengthened one of this series into "Nighttime Games". But as for this and the other 2, I don't have the inspiration to lengthen them. It was fun to write stuff this short...I just don't see myself doing it agin very soon :D.
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